Again , this is a goodwill letter from our fantasy company project.
1st draft
Dear John Doe,
It has come to our attention that a you were responsible for putting J&J Housing Contractors in touch with us. We would like to extended our thanks.
As you may know J&J Housing Contractors has many exciting cutting edge housing projects under way. By way of your recomendation we have been invited to setup and supply the technical automation of at least one of these projects. This is a great new avenue for our company to head in and can only help to grow our business.
To extend our thanks we would like to invite you to choose any add-on for your current system and we will supply it free of charge. You can contact my self or my partners at 800-666-7777.
Thank you again,
Chris Faulkner
Automation Concepts.
Co-Founder
2 comments:
I hope you can get some good work done on your project tonight. I might take the kids to the mall for some fun and let Ruby run, if you want some time to work on it. (I'll bring you a pretzel if you want!)
ummm.. do you mind a constructive comment??
myself is one word, set-up might be hyphenated, i'm not sure so check it out.
the sentence where is says "great avenue for us to head in.."
I would change to exiting opportunity for us to pursue, or something other than head in.
sorry just had too....
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